This still isn't exactly the feel I had in my brain but I decided to get it up anyway.
Here are the changes I'd like to make:
The colors aren't quite right. She disappears into the background.
Maybe the problem is that I'm using too similar of values for the whole thing.
Second problem is scale. Something just feels off about it at this point. Like she needs to be smaller but clearer. Is that possible?
(This is for Illustration Friday)